Policy: Aygun & Kamalya
Uploaded on Aug 03, 2009 / 25 views / 29 impressions / 7 comments
7 comments
nicoledoty21 3:25
Aug 03, 2009
The text on this slide needs to explain the picture. You have no stats about brain activity, just lung cancer and heart disease.
nicoledoty21 3:06
Aug 03, 2009
Bar again...
nicoledoty21 2:09
Aug 03, 2009
These people are choosing to be in a bar where they know it will be smoky. A more convincing picture could have shown someone in line at the grocery store, or at a hotel where they need to be, and where others' actions affect them with no choice to leave.
nicoledoty21 1:23
Aug 03, 2009
"Only" for second hand smokers?! Make sure your word choice is accurate because it can affect the meaning of your arguments.
nicoledoty21 0:30
Aug 03, 2009
Very interesting stats!
nicoledoty21 0:10
Aug 03, 2009
How could you make this statement with more professional language?
nicoledoty21 9:41
Dont add new info after you begin your conclusion!