Viddler

I'm trying to re-cut/re-edit/re-imagine "traction", my first short film.

I know there are a lot of things beyond fixing, like the shitty/uninteresting camera angles and lighting (or lack of it).

I want to try and improve the look (color correcting), editing, and sound.

Not so much fixing the sound as removing it totally and replacing it with a random voice over, and subtitles that tell the actual story.

This is a sample cut from what will become the entire 7 minute short film. I don't know, could be shorter, but the original was 7 minutes.

What do you think of the sample?

PS: The subtitle here was random. I haven' actually written the script for the voice-over yet.