Viddler

looks good--audio needs treatment--Timing is good--music is awful:)

This scene--It's too jolty (my bad), I think we might be able to go straight so the Dr. talking or some other route.

I'd bump the cerebellum title up (in timing not space) just a bit. As in bring it in a few frames earlier. Great color and font choice!

If we were to go the "slides" route, we could repeat with text "Nichole was having trouble with her balance, and etc."

Pacing: I think the lingering here (especially with her mouth moving) is a little awkward. I know you were trying to get to the brain being set down as closure (which is great) but the time between is a little long. I think I got another shot of her setting the brain down. Maybe that could be substituted? Maybe not?

Those past two sound bites. They are both good. I'm not sure they should be together though. Little long. Awkward pause. Would be okay if it was endearing, but it's no opiphany following the pause. you know?

Any way to get her looking away out. Maybe cut to close up on hands for a sec? It's just kind of obvious that she is looking away, and not really interested

I'm assuming the footage after "Yeah" was wierd which is why you cut away, but this cut away doesn't really work for me. It's a continuity problem. Before she was leaning one way, suddenly the other. You were probably trying to get the smile in there eh? Any other ones that fit more naturally?

I like this whole section. Seams authentic.

The cadence of these two answers: What made me want to be a nuerosurgeon and "I like science". I think they should be presented in the opposite order; Nuerosurgeon first, and then doctor. I can't tell because I can't edit it here, but I think the tone of her voice will be better if they come opposite, and the logic won't really change

I'm tempted to end it before thise. less is more. The "intent"of the video is over. Perhaps an update slide that says "Nichole is still bla bla, and Dr. G is still saving lives every day at childrens.'

Oh, and we could do a "Paul is still working on his camera skills" or something more poetic. Seems kind of wierd, but these don't do it much for me.

I'm actually fifty fifty about my last comment. maybe we should present Alex with both versions and give him some power. Overall, great job for a really tough segment.

I'm actually fifty fifty about my last comment. maybe we should present Alex with both versions and give him some power. Overall, great job for a really tough segment.