Viddler

Hey! Because this is the rough version, I would appreciate any feedback (good or bad) so that I can make it better. What works? What doesn't? What's missing? Does it get a reaction out of you? If so, what? Would you forward it to a friend? (please don't forward until we get the final version up) Thanks!

i love that guys voice

As weird as it might seem, Julia Roberts may need some more sort of introduction as to her connection with the film. Maybe a lower third title would do it, or I'm guessing you have more film of her talking.

Something about the text used for the titles isn't sitting right with me. It may be the compressed version of the computer, but that will be your ultimate medium. I think there is a shadow behind the text. Perhaps it might be useful to have a black bar across the bottom with white text comments?

I think the piggy bank should be the background here, to emphasize your point.

I don't know if you want to say that the only goal of the journey was to pimp the chair, because it kind of feels weird with the flow of the music, visuals. If you want to emphasize this, I would switch the music into one of the raps, and change the visuals into more upbeat and less serene.

I think that this is perfect right after the narration.

Something about the wording of this is awkward- maybe "Darius took more than he expected..." or something similar

I really like the fire and the awards appearing.

Some of the comments seem odd next to each other, i.e. "bare knuckle" and "100% fatal". I am confused by all of the different pieces of audio, and the video is telling me something else.

I can't really hear what is being said here.

If I had never seen the film- Hooter Dooter would be completely lost on me.

I would include Charley and Aidan here, to really hone in on this idea of affecting children.

I love this shot- the new goal with the road... I think it's very effective.

I might want to know your goal before the cost of the DVD, maybe "to raise $17 million for DMD research, or to get $17 million closer to a cure, and then tell me how I help you.

This statement could be emphasized in a way that is much more moving. "The cause has been discovered." Also, I'm a stickler for grammar, so I would make it a sentence.

Also, I would make this language stronger. "You know what you can do." or "Don't just sit there like a bump on a wall."

I love this montage! A small note, the audio "some people weren't" appears while Darius is in a balloon, which is confusing.

Next generation quote- I would include the kids again.

I don't understand the use of the desperate housewives scene. It seems out of place from the whole looking towards the future idea.

I think you are trying to incorporate the audio with the video here? "Try and make some moves, by purchasing..." If you are, I would also write out Darius's quote to make that clear.

The Felicity Huffman stuff is confusing me. I really like the quotes from critics, but I want to be able to concentrate on them more.

I really like the quote about purchasing the film and changing lives.