Comments on A Million Sunsets Commentary 1 (pp 1-33)

A Million Sunsets Commentary 1 (pp 1-33)

SaintJoi — Fri, 07 Dec 2007 02:01:39 GMT

SaintJoi posted a comment (12:18):

and the other pages, when I get them uploaded....heh.

A Million Sunsets Commentary 1 (pp 1-33)

SaintJoi — Fri, 07 Dec 2007 02:01:08 GMT

SaintJoi posted a comment (11:53):

yeah. I know I've been reusing words too often, but that's something I always correct in editing later. :)

A Million Sunsets Commentary 1 (pp 1-33)

SaintJoi — Fri, 07 Dec 2007 02:00:20 GMT

SaintJoi posted a comment (11:28):

PLEASE do!!

A Million Sunsets Commentary 1 (pp 1-33)

SaintJoi — Fri, 07 Dec 2007 01:58:58 GMT

SaintJoi posted a comment (10:12):

I'll take a look at it in editing. I can probably rearrange some things.

A Million Sunsets Commentary 1 (pp 1-33)

SaintJoi — Fri, 07 Dec 2007 01:56:50 GMT

SaintJoi posted a comment (8:24):

ok, good, I have a lot more I can put in there. I just can't tell when I'm focusing too much on side issues! Don't want to bore people.

A Million Sunsets Commentary 1 (pp 1-33)

SaintJoi — Fri, 07 Dec 2007 01:55:52 GMT

SaintJoi posted a comment (7:50):

yes, very definately. It becomes more important at the end of the story.

A Million Sunsets Commentary 1 (pp 1-33)

SaintJoi — Fri, 07 Dec 2007 01:55:02 GMT

SaintJoi posted a comment (7:16):

I'm just about to get to the scene that echoes that one. But this time, Mario, Nathanael, and Kaedtiann are all there, too!

A Million Sunsets Commentary 1 (pp 1-33)

SaintJoi — Fri, 07 Dec 2007 01:54:13 GMT

SaintJoi posted a comment (6:57):

wait till you see her in other lifetimes! She ended up being, on one interpretation, the main character.

A Million Sunsets Commentary 1 (pp 1-33)

SaintJoi — Fri, 07 Dec 2007 01:53:11 GMT

SaintJoi posted a comment (6:14):

no, she's definately alone, but you're right, that needs to be set up better.

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SaintJoi — Fri, 07 Dec 2007 01:52:21 GMT

SaintJoi posted a comment (5:42):

Ugh, I'm not that hot at doing relationships...but the whole stinkin' book is about relationships, so I guess I should... :)

A Million Sunsets Commentary 1 (pp 1-33)

SaintJoi — Fri, 07 Dec 2007 01:51:11 GMT

SaintJoi posted a comment (4:56):

yeah, some connecting scenes are missing. I always have to go back and add stuff. SIGH.

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SaintJoi — Fri, 07 Dec 2007 01:49:56 GMT

SaintJoi posted a comment (3:59):

mmm, good point. It's a pretty simple octagonal marble slab. *makes note to go back and add*

A Million Sunsets Commentary 1 (pp 1-33)

SaintJoi — Fri, 07 Dec 2007 01:47:43 GMT

SaintJoi posted a comment (2:19):

yeah....poor Ledan...I might end up changing her name, due to later developments...

A Million Sunsets Commentary 1 (pp 1-33)

SaintJoi — Fri, 07 Dec 2007 01:46:21 GMT

SaintJoi posted a comment (1:15):

yay!

A Million Sunsets Commentary 1 (pp 1-33)

SaintJoi — Fri, 07 Dec 2007 01:41:59 GMT

SaintJoi posted a comment (0:02):

eeeeek!!! nervous!!!!